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哥伦比亚大学、布朗大学的补充文书如何写?内附招生官真实点评

2022-08-26 10:52:12 阅读量:0

出色的申请文书对于成功进入大学至关重要,而补充文书则是说服招生官你最适合这所大学的最佳机会。今天让我们来一起来看看哥伦比亚大学、普林斯顿大学布朗大学和范德堡大学等名校最新补充文书为例,看看到底应该怎么写?内附招生官真实点评哦。

哥伦比亚大学、布朗的补充文书如何写?内附招生官真实点评

2022-2023申请季,有好几所大学换上了新的补充文书题目,主要围绕两个主题:What Brings you Joy(什么能给你带来快乐),和How do you  engage with people experiences and viewpoints that differ from your own(你如何与自己经历和观点不同的人打交道)。

1、What Brings you Joy?

What brings you joy (什么能给你带来快乐)? 不同的学校对这道题的问法会稍有区别:

哥伦比亚大学

In Columbia’s admissions process, we value who you are as a unique individual, distinct from your goals and achievements. In the last words of this writing supplement, we would like you to reflect on a source of happiness. Help us get to know you further by describing the first thing that comes to mind when you consider what simply brings you joy.

在哥伦比亚大学的录取过程中,我们重视你作为一个独特的个体,有别于你的目标和成就。在这篇附加文书的最后几句话里,我们想让你反思一下幸福的源泉。当你考虑什么能给你带来快乐时,你首先想到的是什么,通过描述来帮助我们进一步了解你。

布朗大学

Brown students care deeply about their work and the world around them. Students find contentment, satisfaction, and meaning in daily interactions and major discoveries. Whether big or small, mundane or spectacular, tell us about something that brings you joy.

布朗大学的学生对他们的工作和他们周围的世界非常关心。学生们在日常互动和重大发现中找到满足感、满意度和意义。无论是大的还是小的,平凡的还是壮观的,请告诉我们一些带给你快乐的事情。

麻省理工学院

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do simply for the pleasure of it.

作为高中生,你要完成学校规定的各种任务,生活一定很忙碌。有什么事是你单纯为了乐趣而做的

题目背后的逻辑

不管题目的措辞如何, 美国大学看重的是学生能否在课堂以外与周围社区紧密连接。招生官通过审阅“What brings you joy”了解申请者的兴趣,衡量学生是否能够帮助构建一个互帮互助、和谐美好的校园环境。

这个问题更能体现申请学生的真实兴趣和投入程度,让招生官信服你的主观能动性。

另外招生官还想看到学生是否有自信在申请材料中分享一些更个人化的东西,而不仅是所谓的“非凡成就”。这让申请学生的形象看起来更立体鲜活,也体现着学生的自信。

范文示例:The camaraderie when I see another runner on cross country trails. The smiles, waves, and nods that—without words—communicate our connection: the shared sweat, shin splints, determination, exhilaration. No words are needed. But we are as one, a fraternity in whose membership I find joy.

译文:在越野小径遇到跑者的那一刻我看到的是友情。无声地微笑、挥手和点头致意就能传达我们彼此间的联系:汗水,护膝,决心和激情。无需多言,我们就是一个团队,我为队员感到高兴。

前招生官点评:阅读这篇文书时,可以感受到作者带着微笑在跑步,也能感受到跑者间的情谊。跑步带来的伤痛、挑战和自豪感,让他们彼此有着深层次的链接。学生在文书中体现出了他认为有意义的事,这是一篇通过反思撰写的文书。

2、Diverse viewpoints

另外一大主题是关于Diverse viewpoints不同观点的互动的题目,范德堡大学今年首次公布了关于不同观点互动的补充文书题目,其它大学也有类似题目通过观点间的碰撞,来理解我们的差异性。

范德堡大学

Vanderbilt University values learning through contrasting points of view. We understand that our differences, and our respect for alternative views and voices, are our greatest source of strength. Please reflect on conversations you’ve had with people who have expressed viewpoints different from your own. How did these conversations/experiences influence you?

范德堡大学重视从不同观点中的学习,我们认为不同的观点和声音是力量的源泉。请回顾一下你与不同观点的人如何对话,这些对话/经历对你有和影响

布朗大学

Brown’s culture fosters a community in which students challenge the ideas of others and have their ideas challenged in return, promoting a deeper and clearer understanding of the complex issues confronting society. This active engagement in dialogue is as present outside the classroom as it is in academic spaces. Tell us about a time you were challenged by a perspective that differed from your own. How did you respond?

布朗大学的文化培养了这样一个社区:学生们在此挑战他人的想法,自己的想法也会受到挑战,从而促进对社会所面临的复杂问题有更深更清晰的理解。这种积极参与对话的方式存在于课堂内外。请告诉我们,你曾经受到过与你自己观点不同的挑战吗?你是如何回应的?

普林斯顿大学

At Princeton, we value diverse perspectives and the ability to have respectful dialogue about difficult issues. Share a time when you had a conversation with a person or a group of people about a difficult topic. What insight did you gain, and how would you incorporate that knowledge into your thinking in the future?

在普林斯顿,我们非常重视思想多元化和深入探讨问题的能力。你是否曾经与他人探讨过某个艰深的话题?你从中获得了什么启发?你会如何把这一启发融入今后的思考当中?

题目背后的逻辑

问题背后的核心是:你是否表现出足够的同理心和好奇心,愿意接受改变?你撰写的主题可以是个人的、艺术的,甚至是学术的。明白了这一点,你才能动笔作答。

范文示例1:My first favorite Chinese cuisine was Hunan food, because my grandmother would make it for me when I grew up and it was better than any food I could get at a restaurant .Then when I was older, I traveled to Yunnan for a research project and ate in the local villages there. The combination of fresh ingredients was unlike anything I’d ever had before! Though I don’t want to diminish my grandmother’s cooking skills, I have come to recognize that Yunnan food—at least the kind you can find in Yunnan villages—is my favorite Chinese cuisine.

译文1:我最喜欢的中国菜是湖南菜,因为看我长大的奶奶会做给我吃,比餐馆的任何食物都好吃。后来我长大了,去云南做一个研究项目,在当地的村子里吃饭。新鲜食材的组合不同于我以前吃过的任何东西!虽然我不想贬低奶奶的厨艺,但我已经认识到云南菜——至少是你在云南农村能找到的那种——是我最喜欢的中国菜 。

范文示例2:I thought that studying gravitational waves was the best way to understand the nature of the universe, but the images from the new James Webb telescope have ushered in a whole new era of observational inference.

译文2:我以为研究引力波是了解宇宙本质的最佳方式,但来自新詹姆斯韦伯望远镜的图像开创了观测推断的全新时代。

前招生官点评:如何为“重视思想多元化观点”文书做准备?是个多步骤的过程:首先你必须有个原始观点,这个观点不只是一句话意见这么简单,它是一种看待问题的角度。然后必须(有意或无意地)接触一些新信息,这可能会让你重新评估该观点,通过多种意见的融合,批判性思维而发展。

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